We spend our days playing in the closet.
In our imagination it is a spaceship, a doorway to other worlds, a portal that can travel through time. In the darkness we act out our fantasies, constructing the characters of our narrative. We play with the treasures that surround us – costumes in boxes, paperwork on shelves, trinkets that remind us of our parents.
We play all day in the closet, waiting for the door to be unlocked once more.
Paul Thompson 
‘that reminds us of our parents’ has an ominous ring to it. I’m hoping it’s innocent play, but I fear something much worse.
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KIller last line
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Didn’t see that one coming. Glad the kids had fun while they were being punished by their medieval parent/caretaker.
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Dear Hombre,
That last line made my heart stop.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Oof! What a dark twist at the end. I didn’t see that one coming.
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Seems like some abusive relatives/ guardians here. The last line was exceptionally dark.
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Well! That’s some last line! There’s me thinking it was a sweet tale of childhood fantasy and wham! You hit me with abuse. Heartbreaking
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Now that took me by surprise. What a last line!
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Nice piece i like that
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This made my heart stop… hope they will be released soon.
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Wasn’t expecting that last line… not one bit.
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Such an innocent story of childhood fun until that last line. Nice one!
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Not the ending I was expecting. They seem to have accepted their situation. Excellent.
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I loved this story where I saw the closet as our world where we are trapped to play, and fight over petty matters, while away time until we are freed or and attain moksha or nirvana 🙂
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Killer twist in the tail there!
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Oof! That last line sure changed the color of the rest of the story!
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Wonderfully written story. The last line is ace. Naivety to imprisonment in the blink of an eye. Well done, hombre person. And on your recently published flash fiction story in the Drabble which I also enjoyed.
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You know you’ve done well when you leave all your readers with the feeling of being punched in the gut. Very well done… Flowers in the Attic-style.
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This has such a sweet innocent set-up so the unlocking comes as an unexpected and powerful shock.
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Goodness, I didn’t expect the dark twist at the end. Great one!
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The story lulled me into such a lovely state of nostalgia–and then the gut punch. Nicely done!
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